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A girl that is hidden,
By a smile so sweet,
When people see her,
They say it's a treat,

A smile that hides all,
The truth and the pain,
Where once it was real,
Now, shattered in vain,

As the sun goes down,
And ends the day,
The smile that lies there,
Whittles away.
well, it isnt very long, ill probably finish it at some point
Pretty much, its about a girl whose smile can light up a room, but it isn’t real and from the heart. It just came to me a few days ago, and well, I didn’t think it was that bad and wondered if you’d like to hear. Comments and favs are all greatly appreciated and tips for improvement are also nice.
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:iconnightembersglowing:
nightembersglowing Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So beautiful ^^
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Shadow534 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
ta XD nd thanks for la fav XD
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:iconnightembersglowing:
nightembersglowing Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry about it! ^^
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Shadow534 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
still though ta XD
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:iconnightembersglowing:
nightembersglowing Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry 'bout it! XD
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Shadow534 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013
heheh XD i wasnt :D
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Insomniac-Corpse Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
That's beautiful. <3
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Shadow534 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013
thank you, sooo much, it means a lot to me XD :tighthug:
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